Walt: holidays recount show don't tell
Blub of task holiday recount
Holiday Recount
Reflection FB Descriptive adjectives, some sizzling start used.
FF Makes sense? , spelling, - change case e.g T-t add punctuation, rewrite, Change the word]
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In the past few days, we have been writing about our holiday. This is my one.
By Kahurangi
Kia ora Kahurangi,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your descriptive holiday recount and the way you used the five senses to describe what you did in the holidays. Maybe next time you could work on checking your punctuation and using paragraphs. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
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ReplyDeleteKia ora Kahurangi my name is Alexandrea and i'm a year seven student at Paihia School. I really like your recount about The gates of the mall because you have a lot of descriptive words in your recount and that makes it more interesting to read. I think you have done a good job on your recount because it is a really cool and attractive. Did you enjoy writing this recount ?
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